Show Don’t Tell – Constructive Criticism

I received a comment on my previous post from someone calling themselves "randomperson". I am doubting this is his or her real name, but I greatly appreciate the feedback. "Randomperson" mentioned that I write well for someone just starting out in fiction, but "your storytelling oftentimes violates the “show, don’t tell” rule. you generally seem to do a little too much telling and not enough showing, which can make a narrative less compelling and exciting". At first I wasn't sure what to make of this, but now that I think about it I am glad I received this comment.

I would say it is a fair observation that I tend to tell rather than show in my fiction. In other words, if I think a character is a sloppy drunk, I write "Fred is a sloppy drunk" rather than show you through Fred's actions that he can't hold his liquor. I agree that it is much more interesting to learn about a character on your own rather than be told about the character. Now that I know this about my writing, I can take steps to correct the problem. Easier said than done, right?